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Yunie Rhondaj
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Name: Yunie Rhondaj
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Alliance: Sentou Gakuin
Age: 16
Homeland:
Yunie Rhondaj used to live in the village called Junnune Seifer, which
was in a country known as the Bright Country. This country was
beautiful and filled with lush green plants. The village of Junnune
Seifer was also a sight to behold as it had many different appearances
for every season of the year. During the winter, pure white snow
showered the village with beauty and filled the hearts of the people
with joy. In the Summer time the hot sun was a nuisance to some but
happy times for others as the heat wasn't extreme but a balance of few
very hot days and many average warm days. The Fall brought beautiful
leaves and perfect weather conditions and the Spring was a combination
of the other three seasons. The village had buildings that were
designed with wood and brick. This place was like paradise for Yunie.
She had parks nearby to relax at and many friends to be around. Life
wasn't as easy as it looked here though. The village Junnune Seifer
held many secrets within its lands and the village was well prepared
for combat as it had ninja squads and spellcasters that knew many
techniques to prepare themselves for an endless variety of situations.
Some would call this place paradise;Others would call this place a
living nightmare.
Appearance:
Yunie
appears to others in many different ways based on her assignment or
situation. She is either in her average clothing or shinobi outfit
which is designed for battles of any kind. Her average clothing is like
a cut kimono as it reaches a bit farther up past her knees. Also, the
top of the kimono also appears as though it is cut since it doesn't
cover her entire chest and arms but only covers a little more than half
of her chest and doesn't cover her arms at all. Long gloves that also
look as though they were cut are seen on Yunie's arms and they start
from a little bit below the shoulder and end just before her fingers.
At the bottom of Yunie's average outfit is a pink outline that was made
there since it is one of her favorite colors. A large butterfly is seen
on the left botton of the outfit. A large pink bow is worn around
Yunie's waist when wearing this outfit to keep the Kimono held up.
[Right Click and press View Image to see the entire picture]
Yunie's battle outfit is a more traditional type outfit made
specifically for ninja in her Country. Some things differ between a
more traditional outfit and hers, but the same concept originates from
it. Yunie's outfit is mostly dark purple, which has recently helped her
so far on missions and special tasks. There is a shirt worn under a
large ninja coat that is heavy and hard in order to defend from various
ninja weapons and tools of offensive combat. Most of Yunie's skin is
concealed with this on, except her fingers which are revealed in order
to grip things easily. Arm guards have been provided so that she can
defend in hand to hand with ease and block large weapons like kunai,
wires, and shuriken that may otherwise prove harmful. Like her arms,
the leggings of her pants also have guards on them for the same
reasons. They also protect her from blades in the grass or from
poisonous plants. Her sandals are equipped with a steel sole that allow
her to walk on ninja spikes safely without needing to slow down or
maneuver around them. Various designs and markings are on her ninja
outfit that specify which ninja village she came from. Unfortunately,
the ninja outfit is too heavy to always wear and there are too many
things to always carry so she would need to change somewhere else or
fight without the ninja outfit if its a sudden and unexpected battle.
Yunie Rhondaj has lavender colored hair that is usually mistaken for pink hair. Her eyes are a red color and give a happy sensation about herself even in dire times. On her head is a headband that she always wears no matter what. The headband is black and partially tattered because of where she got it from. It was given to her from uncle who wasn't that much older than her. An epic battle occured and he was killed during the battle. As it was dying, he gave it to her. The headband, under close observation, has the villages writing and says: Never Give Up and Walk Your Own Path.
Ranking: Elite
Personality:
Yunie has a broad personality compared to many because of the events that preceded her coming to Sentou Gakuin. Yunie has compassion, anger, fear, sorrow, joy, and regret. Her emotions that she has make up her unique personality. A person that knows her will think of her as a happy and carefree person that is always in a good mood. However if a person knew her any better, they'd know that her joy and carefree attitude comes from her uncle dying in battle and saving her. She was taught to love all by her uncle and to remain strong no matter what. She has an attitude of inner peace and a loving and forgiving soul. She has some anger for what has happened in the past, but she doesn't seek revenge because she was taught not to. Even though she is compassionate and not drawn in by anger, she still fights for what she thinks is right and knows the best time to fight. In battle, she is described as having a calm attitude even if she is losing the fight and she doesn't fill with rage but instead takes the emotions that would be, such as anger and fear, and turns them into positive energy to fuel herself in different situations.
Type of Warrior:
Type 1: Ninja
Type 2: Spellcaster
Type 3: Alchemist
Elemental Affinity:
Element 1: Sound
Element 2: Light
History/Character's Background Story:
Yunie was born in the village of Junnue Seifer in the pure Winter. She was a snow child at her childhood and loved playing in the snow with her many friends. At that time, she thought life was paradise. There was no worries in the village and she played with her many friends and her pet weasel that changed colors during different seasons. Like any child, Yunie learned how to walk and speak when it was appropriate and even began to learn the secret family style of Genryuutoh Muaji Ninjutsu a few months after she turned 6. Missions were given at an early age to build experience and a feel for ninja life, but the missions were childish missions that involved finding specific types of flowers or even catching lost animals. To Yunie, at that age, this was perfect. She could have fun with these missions and continue having fun as she grew. She loved her village and thought there was nothing wrong with it at all. Age 8, everything changed. Her parents were heard to have argued against the generals of the village who were the 5 highest ranked ninja and controlled the village and various parts of the country. Their parents were not punished in ways that one would expect like torture, serving the village for a set amount of time, or even instant death but instead they were given a mission. This mission required them to investigate a deal that occured in a nearby village in which they had to build a team of 5 people and learn information and report back. Yunie's parents had hoped that they had gotten off easily. A week and a half passed since the start of the mission and the departure of her parents when a message was sent back saying that all of the ninja on the mission were killed. No one could find out who did it. No one really tried, well almost no one tried. Yunie's uncle tried to gather information secretly along with his son, Yunie's cousin. The two of them gathered information and had an assumption that the 5 Generals set up an ambush to kill every ninja on the mission. The information caused Yunie to cry endlessly throughout the night. Her fighting style that she learned from her parents began to become less organized and began to become reckless. "Uncle, I'm going to get the Generals for this. I won't let them pay for killing my mom and dad." The uncle said nothing when he heard these words from Yunie but instead he and his son brought it to the General's attention, knowing that there would be likely consequences. Both of them trained, and they trained Yunie since she now lived with them. Years passed with nothing happening. Yunie was now 11 and she learned a lot from her cousin and uncle. She learned how to balance her emotions into power and she learned how to fight much better than many of the children in her village. At home, the three of them received a letter. The letter stated that one of the General's sons died by the hands of Yunie's cousin. The uncle was enraged but didn't let his emotions show. Instead, he let out a heavy breath of air. The cousin prepared himself by passing on secret techniques to Yunie. Yunie simply cried. Two weeks had passed and on one dark day in the Fall, Yunie's cousin was sentenced to death. He didn't really kill the General's son, but an excuse was necessary to kill another villager without fingers being pointed. They killed him in front of the entire country and left his body there alone. This was done to get at Yunie's uncle for the comments made by him and his son years ago. Afterwards, the country and the village more specifically became a place of fear. Everyone were afraid to do anything because of these tyrants. Yunie's uncle decided that this fear within the country had to stop and that he needed to protect those that he loved. On a hot Summer day while Yunie was 15, all of the ninja that were afraid of the Generals abandoned their homes and set out for better lives. One by one, the village mysteriously began to dwindle down in numbers. In a forest is where Yunie and her uncle made their way. He spoke to her about the Generals and about what was most likely going to happen. "Yunie. I've raised you since your parents died and treated you like my daughter when my only son died. I've taught you many things and I hope that you use them properly. Remember that you should never let your negative feelings and emotions control you but you should fill your mind with the positive energies of your emotions. There is a school faraway from here known as Sentou Gakuin. I think that we should head there. You can enroll and further your training there while I become a teacher and spread my knowledge. In the end, we can still be together." She gave him a hug and said, "Once we become stronger, we can come back and defeat the Generals, right?" The uncle shook his head. "No. Remember what I taught you Yunie. You should never seek revenge under any circumstances and should learn to keep your mind clear and away from thoughts of vengeance." She shook her head and her gave her a map. "Here, take this map. I want you to hold onto it. It will take point you in the direction of Sentou Gakuin from here." Yunie wondered why she was given this but asked no questions. She simply put it away. The uncle then stood up with his eyes closed. Rustles were heard nearby and from the trees and the plants surrounding them emerged the 5 Generals themselves in specially made shinobi armor. They looked angry and attacked without any words. yunie's uncle immediately attacked with the fastest speed she had ever seen anyone move. He easily took out two of the Generals. A few strikes were taken from the four of them until a third General fell. "RUN AWAY! QUICK!" That's what the uncle could say to Yunie. She was too scared to listen though and remained. Her feet felt like they were frozen in place. In an instant, the fourth General fell dead but the fifth delivered a critical blast of lightning to her uncle. The uncle fell to the ground but caught himself. He ran up to the General and pierced his armor and his chest with a small dagger. Both of them fell. The General seemed to have been dead but the uncle appeared to have a bit more life in him. He was wearing a headband that he called his lucky headband. Yunie couldn't help but cry as she saw her wounded uncle. "Uncle!! What can I do to make you better?! Don't die!! You can't die!! If you die, there's no one left for me!! Uncle!!" Yunie's uncle touched her forehead and whispered with his final breath. "I'm sorry. I can no longer join you. Yunie...control your...emotions and...you...can....be great. Continue to Sentou Gakuin.....there are allies there...you...will....find....your.....place." WIth those final words, Yunie's uncle passed away and his hand fell to the ground. She spent the day making a small burial shrine for him and she did it with her courage that he gave her and the tears she lost. When the shrine was finally built, it read:
RPing Sample:
Yunie sat in her room thinking to herself about how her life was turning out. Those that she loved were dying and it was all because of the 5 Generals. She thought to herself about them killing her parents and then about them killing her cousin in front of everyone. Her cousin was like a brother to her. He was her very best friend that she could have and was always there on the worse days. It made Yunie cry knowing that a person that you spent your life with and a person that was always there for you was gone forever and that there was no way of bringing him back. In her mind and from her tears, she felt like marching up to the Generals sanctuary and attacking them. She knew better. Her uncle taught her to never seek revenge and to never hold onto feelings of vengeance. She wondered if that would be possible for her. She had so many emotions and they were bottled up inside. Her uncle told her that if she could control her emotions she could become more powerful and grow happier. She cried more in the silence of her room alone. She knew that she would have to cheer up but it was hard knowing that those you love will never return to you and they'll forever be lost. She would keep them alive in her memories but that wasn't enough. She looked out of the window and thought about the happy times she had when she was younger. They were gone. All of the friends she had when she was younger. They were gone. She thought of the fun missions she had and how they cheered her up. They were gone. She thought about her parents; her mother, her father, and she thought about her cousin who was like a brother. They too were gone.
[more coming soon. Not done]]
Name: Yunie Rhondaj
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Alliance: Sentou Gakuin
Age: 16
Homeland:
Yunie Rhondaj used to live in the village called Junnune Seifer, which
was in a country known as the Bright Country. This country was
beautiful and filled with lush green plants. The village of Junnune
Seifer was also a sight to behold as it had many different appearances
for every season of the year. During the winter, pure white snow
showered the village with beauty and filled the hearts of the people
with joy. In the Summer time the hot sun was a nuisance to some but
happy times for others as the heat wasn't extreme but a balance of few
very hot days and many average warm days. The Fall brought beautiful
leaves and perfect weather conditions and the Spring was a combination
of the other three seasons. The village had buildings that were
designed with wood and brick. This place was like paradise for Yunie.
She had parks nearby to relax at and many friends to be around. Life
wasn't as easy as it looked here though. The village Junnune Seifer
held many secrets within its lands and the village was well prepared
for combat as it had ninja squads and spellcasters that knew many
techniques to prepare themselves for an endless variety of situations.
Some would call this place paradise;Others would call this place a
living nightmare.
Appearance:
Yunie
appears to others in many different ways based on her assignment or
situation. She is either in her average clothing or shinobi outfit
which is designed for battles of any kind. Her average clothing is like
a cut kimono as it reaches a bit farther up past her knees. Also, the
top of the kimono also appears as though it is cut since it doesn't
cover her entire chest and arms but only covers a little more than half
of her chest and doesn't cover her arms at all. Long gloves that also
look as though they were cut are seen on Yunie's arms and they start
from a little bit below the shoulder and end just before her fingers.
At the bottom of Yunie's average outfit is a pink outline that was made
there since it is one of her favorite colors. A large butterfly is seen
on the left botton of the outfit. A large pink bow is worn around
Yunie's waist when wearing this outfit to keep the Kimono held up.
[Right Click and press View Image to see the entire picture]
Yunie's battle outfit is a more traditional type outfit made
specifically for ninja in her Country. Some things differ between a
more traditional outfit and hers, but the same concept originates from
it. Yunie's outfit is mostly dark purple, which has recently helped her
so far on missions and special tasks. There is a shirt worn under a
large ninja coat that is heavy and hard in order to defend from various
ninja weapons and tools of offensive combat. Most of Yunie's skin is
concealed with this on, except her fingers which are revealed in order
to grip things easily. Arm guards have been provided so that she can
defend in hand to hand with ease and block large weapons like kunai,
wires, and shuriken that may otherwise prove harmful. Like her arms,
the leggings of her pants also have guards on them for the same
reasons. They also protect her from blades in the grass or from
poisonous plants. Her sandals are equipped with a steel sole that allow
her to walk on ninja spikes safely without needing to slow down or
maneuver around them. Various designs and markings are on her ninja
outfit that specify which ninja village she came from. Unfortunately,
the ninja outfit is too heavy to always wear and there are too many
things to always carry so she would need to change somewhere else or
fight without the ninja outfit if its a sudden and unexpected battle.
Yunie Rhondaj has lavender colored hair that is usually mistaken for pink hair. Her eyes are a red color and give a happy sensation about herself even in dire times. On her head is a headband that she always wears no matter what. The headband is black and partially tattered because of where she got it from. It was given to her from uncle who wasn't that much older than her. An epic battle occured and he was killed during the battle. As it was dying, he gave it to her. The headband, under close observation, has the villages writing and says: Never Give Up and Walk Your Own Path.
Ranking: Elite
Personality:
Yunie has a broad personality compared to many because of the events that preceded her coming to Sentou Gakuin. Yunie has compassion, anger, fear, sorrow, joy, and regret. Her emotions that she has make up her unique personality. A person that knows her will think of her as a happy and carefree person that is always in a good mood. However if a person knew her any better, they'd know that her joy and carefree attitude comes from her uncle dying in battle and saving her. She was taught to love all by her uncle and to remain strong no matter what. She has an attitude of inner peace and a loving and forgiving soul. She has some anger for what has happened in the past, but she doesn't seek revenge because she was taught not to. Even though she is compassionate and not drawn in by anger, she still fights for what she thinks is right and knows the best time to fight. In battle, she is described as having a calm attitude even if she is losing the fight and she doesn't fill with rage but instead takes the emotions that would be, such as anger and fear, and turns them into positive energy to fuel herself in different situations.
Type of Warrior:
Type 1: Ninja
Type 2: Spellcaster
Type 3: Alchemist
Elemental Affinity:
Element 1: Sound
Element 2: Light
History/Character's Background Story:
Yunie was born in the village of Junnue Seifer in the pure Winter. She was a snow child at her childhood and loved playing in the snow with her many friends. At that time, she thought life was paradise. There was no worries in the village and she played with her many friends and her pet weasel that changed colors during different seasons. Like any child, Yunie learned how to walk and speak when it was appropriate and even began to learn the secret family style of Genryuutoh Muaji Ninjutsu a few months after she turned 6. Missions were given at an early age to build experience and a feel for ninja life, but the missions were childish missions that involved finding specific types of flowers or even catching lost animals. To Yunie, at that age, this was perfect. She could have fun with these missions and continue having fun as she grew. She loved her village and thought there was nothing wrong with it at all. Age 8, everything changed. Her parents were heard to have argued against the generals of the village who were the 5 highest ranked ninja and controlled the village and various parts of the country. Their parents were not punished in ways that one would expect like torture, serving the village for a set amount of time, or even instant death but instead they were given a mission. This mission required them to investigate a deal that occured in a nearby village in which they had to build a team of 5 people and learn information and report back. Yunie's parents had hoped that they had gotten off easily. A week and a half passed since the start of the mission and the departure of her parents when a message was sent back saying that all of the ninja on the mission were killed. No one could find out who did it. No one really tried, well almost no one tried. Yunie's uncle tried to gather information secretly along with his son, Yunie's cousin. The two of them gathered information and had an assumption that the 5 Generals set up an ambush to kill every ninja on the mission. The information caused Yunie to cry endlessly throughout the night. Her fighting style that she learned from her parents began to become less organized and began to become reckless. "Uncle, I'm going to get the Generals for this. I won't let them pay for killing my mom and dad." The uncle said nothing when he heard these words from Yunie but instead he and his son brought it to the General's attention, knowing that there would be likely consequences. Both of them trained, and they trained Yunie since she now lived with them. Years passed with nothing happening. Yunie was now 11 and she learned a lot from her cousin and uncle. She learned how to balance her emotions into power and she learned how to fight much better than many of the children in her village. At home, the three of them received a letter. The letter stated that one of the General's sons died by the hands of Yunie's cousin. The uncle was enraged but didn't let his emotions show. Instead, he let out a heavy breath of air. The cousin prepared himself by passing on secret techniques to Yunie. Yunie simply cried. Two weeks had passed and on one dark day in the Fall, Yunie's cousin was sentenced to death. He didn't really kill the General's son, but an excuse was necessary to kill another villager without fingers being pointed. They killed him in front of the entire country and left his body there alone. This was done to get at Yunie's uncle for the comments made by him and his son years ago. Afterwards, the country and the village more specifically became a place of fear. Everyone were afraid to do anything because of these tyrants. Yunie's uncle decided that this fear within the country had to stop and that he needed to protect those that he loved. On a hot Summer day while Yunie was 15, all of the ninja that were afraid of the Generals abandoned their homes and set out for better lives. One by one, the village mysteriously began to dwindle down in numbers. In a forest is where Yunie and her uncle made their way. He spoke to her about the Generals and about what was most likely going to happen. "Yunie. I've raised you since your parents died and treated you like my daughter when my only son died. I've taught you many things and I hope that you use them properly. Remember that you should never let your negative feelings and emotions control you but you should fill your mind with the positive energies of your emotions. There is a school faraway from here known as Sentou Gakuin. I think that we should head there. You can enroll and further your training there while I become a teacher and spread my knowledge. In the end, we can still be together." She gave him a hug and said, "Once we become stronger, we can come back and defeat the Generals, right?" The uncle shook his head. "No. Remember what I taught you Yunie. You should never seek revenge under any circumstances and should learn to keep your mind clear and away from thoughts of vengeance." She shook her head and her gave her a map. "Here, take this map. I want you to hold onto it. It will take point you in the direction of Sentou Gakuin from here." Yunie wondered why she was given this but asked no questions. She simply put it away. The uncle then stood up with his eyes closed. Rustles were heard nearby and from the trees and the plants surrounding them emerged the 5 Generals themselves in specially made shinobi armor. They looked angry and attacked without any words. yunie's uncle immediately attacked with the fastest speed she had ever seen anyone move. He easily took out two of the Generals. A few strikes were taken from the four of them until a third General fell. "RUN AWAY! QUICK!" That's what the uncle could say to Yunie. She was too scared to listen though and remained. Her feet felt like they were frozen in place. In an instant, the fourth General fell dead but the fifth delivered a critical blast of lightning to her uncle. The uncle fell to the ground but caught himself. He ran up to the General and pierced his armor and his chest with a small dagger. Both of them fell. The General seemed to have been dead but the uncle appeared to have a bit more life in him. He was wearing a headband that he called his lucky headband. Yunie couldn't help but cry as she saw her wounded uncle. "Uncle!! What can I do to make you better?! Don't die!! You can't die!! If you die, there's no one left for me!! Uncle!!" Yunie's uncle touched her forehead and whispered with his final breath. "I'm sorry. I can no longer join you. Yunie...control your...emotions and...you...can....be great. Continue to Sentou Gakuin.....there are allies there...you...will....find....your.....place." WIth those final words, Yunie's uncle passed away and his hand fell to the ground. She spent the day making a small burial shrine for him and she did it with her courage that he gave her and the tears she lost. When the shrine was finally built, it read:
Here lies an honorable shinobi. In this place rests the man that changed the present to allow us to have a future. May he rest in piece.
She walked away into the darkness of night with her thoughts and her emotions. Her past, present, and future self has been changed for the better. She thought to herself, "Who would have thought that a man's death could alter my life this much?" A year later, she finally came to Sentou Gakuin. She was nervous but she fought bravely with all that was taught. A few tears were shed when she first arrived. She looked around and hoped that her uncle wasn't truly dead and would catch up. Even to this day, she believes that he isn't dead and that he will return to join her. She never doubts that he may have lost his way without his map and may simply be taking his time. She sometimes wonders if he is alive and is simply rebuilding the village that they used to live in.RPing Sample:
Yunie sat in her room thinking to herself about how her life was turning out. Those that she loved were dying and it was all because of the 5 Generals. She thought to herself about them killing her parents and then about them killing her cousin in front of everyone. Her cousin was like a brother to her. He was her very best friend that she could have and was always there on the worse days. It made Yunie cry knowing that a person that you spent your life with and a person that was always there for you was gone forever and that there was no way of bringing him back. In her mind and from her tears, she felt like marching up to the Generals sanctuary and attacking them. She knew better. Her uncle taught her to never seek revenge and to never hold onto feelings of vengeance. She wondered if that would be possible for her. She had so many emotions and they were bottled up inside. Her uncle told her that if she could control her emotions she could become more powerful and grow happier. She cried more in the silence of her room alone. She knew that she would have to cheer up but it was hard knowing that those you love will never return to you and they'll forever be lost. She would keep them alive in her memories but that wasn't enough. She looked out of the window and thought about the happy times she had when she was younger. They were gone. All of the friends she had when she was younger. They were gone. She thought of the fun missions she had and how they cheered her up. They were gone. She thought about her parents; her mother, her father, and she thought about her cousin who was like a brother. They too were gone.
[more coming soon. Not done]]
Last edited by Dagomis on September 7th 2008, 1:54 pm; edited 3 times in total (Reason for editing : I didn't finish my character.)
Lockheart42- Rank Yellow Warrior
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Number of posts : 246
Age : 31
Location : the center of somewhere
Occupation : You wish I knew that he had your something?
Interests : My interests are interesting
The BattleField
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(1800/1800)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
(1300/1300)
Experience Points :
(100/100)
Lockheart42- Rank Yellow Warrior
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Number of posts : 246
Age : 31
Location : the center of somewhere
Occupation : You wish I knew that he had your something?
Interests : My interests are interesting
The BattleField
Health Points:
(1800/1800)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
(1300/1300)
Experience Points :
(100/100)
Re: Yunie Rhondaj
The RP Sample isn't long enough. This might possibly be excused because some of the things in your history help you to meet the requirements, but it is all up to Jisenki.
Guest- Guest
Re: Yunie Rhondaj
Nice character!! The long history is great and you seem to have put a lot of time and effort into this. Nice use of the Dead or Alive character too!!
Riko- Rank Blue Warrior
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Number of posts : 356
Age : 33
Location : Dancing through the storms of destiny
Occupation : I don't know, what's yours?
Interests : Do I look like I have interests?
The BattleField
Health Points:
(2200/3000)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
(1700/2500)
Experience Points :
(100/100)
Re: Yunie Rhondaj
My RPing sample is 21 lines with the extra few words.
Lockheart42- Rank Yellow Warrior
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Number of posts : 246
Age : 31
Location : the center of somewhere
Occupation : You wish I knew that he had your something?
Interests : My interests are interesting
The BattleField
Health Points:
(1800/1800)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
(1300/1300)
Experience Points :
(100/100)
Re: Yunie Rhondaj
It is only 13 lines long, the number that you count is the one that you see when you have already pressed 'Submit' the one that people, who can't edit the post see when they view this topic.
Guest- Guest
Re: Yunie Rhondaj
Its fine Militis. Its long enough and the entire character profile was good so I think we can approve.
Jisenki- Head Warrior
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Number of posts : 1722
Age : 32
Location : Down the path of life
Occupation : The guy with the sword
Interests : Martial Arts, Kung-fu, Swordsmanship
The BattleField
Health Points:
(6400/6400)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
(4400/4400)
Experience Points :
(63/100)
Re: Yunie Rhondaj
Yunie sat in her room thinking to herself about how her life was
turning out. Those that she loved were dying and it was all because of
the 5 Generals. She thought to herself about them killing her parents
and then about them killing her cousin in front of everyone. Her cousin
was like a brother to her. He was her very best friend that she could
have and was always there on the worse days. It made Yunie cry knowing
that a person that you spent your life with and a person that was
always there for you was gone forever and that there was no way of
bringing him back. In her mind and from her tears, she felt like
marching up to the Generals sanctuary and attacking them. She knew
better. Her uncle taught her to never seek revenge and to never hold
onto feelings of vengeance. She wondered if that would be possible for
her. She had so many emotions and they were bottled up inside. Her
uncle told her that if she could control her emotions she could become
more powerful and grow happier. She cried more in the silence of her
room alone. She knew that she would have to cheer up but it was hard
knowing that those you love will never return to you and they'll
forever be lost. She would keep them alive in her memories but that
wasn't enough. She looked out of the window and thought about the happy
times she had when she was younger. They were gone. All of the friends
she had when she was younger. They were gone. She thought of the fun
missions she had and she was younger. They were gone. She thought of the fun
missions she had and mother, her father, and she thought
about her cousin who was like a brother. They too were gone.
Twenty lines and three more words to make the twenty first. Its more than twenty and it meets the criteria. There's nothing wrong with it.
turning out. Those that she loved were dying and it was all because of
the 5 Generals. She thought to herself about them killing her parents
and then about them killing her cousin in front of everyone. Her cousin
was like a brother to her. He was her very best friend that she could
have and was always there on the worse days. It made Yunie cry knowing
that a person that you spent your life with and a person that was
always there for you was gone forever and that there was no way of
bringing him back. In her mind and from her tears, she felt like
marching up to the Generals sanctuary and attacking them. She knew
better. Her uncle taught her to never seek revenge and to never hold
onto feelings of vengeance. She wondered if that would be possible for
her. She had so many emotions and they were bottled up inside. Her
uncle told her that if she could control her emotions she could become
more powerful and grow happier. She cried more in the silence of her
room alone. She knew that she would have to cheer up but it was hard
knowing that those you love will never return to you and they'll
forever be lost. She would keep them alive in her memories but that
wasn't enough. She looked out of the window and thought about the happy
times she had when she was younger. They were gone. All of the friends
she had when she was younger. They were gone. She thought of the fun
missions she had and she was younger. They were gone. She thought of the fun
missions she had and mother, her father, and she thought
about her cousin who was like a brother. They too were gone.
- Yunie sat in her room thinking to herself about how her life was
turning out. Those - that she loved were dying and it was all because of
the 5 Generals. She thought to - herself about them killing her parents
and then about them killing her cousin in front - of everyone. Her cousin
was like a brother to her. He was her very best friend that - she could
have and was always there on the worse days. It made Yunie cry knowing
that a person that you spent your life with and a person that was
always there for- you was gone forever and that there was no way of
bringing him back. In her mind - and from her tears, she felt like
marching up to the Generals sanctuary and - attacking them. She knew
better. Her uncle taught her to never seek revenge and - to never hold
onto feelings of vengeance. She wondered if that would be possible - for
her. She had so many emotions and they were bottled up inside. Her
uncle told - her that if she could control her emotions she could become
more powerful and grow - happier. She cried more in the silence of her
room alone. She knew that she would - have to cheer up but it was hard
knowing that those you love will never return to - you and they'll
forever be lost. She would keep them alive in her memories but that - wasn't enough. She looked out of the window and thought about the happy
times - she had when she was younger. They were gone. All of the friends
she had when - she was younger. They were gone. She thought of the fun
missions she had and - was younger. They were gone. She thought of the fun
missions she had and mother, - her father, and she thought
about her cousin who was like a brother. They - too were gone.
Twenty lines and three more words to make the twenty first. Its more than twenty and it meets the criteria. There's nothing wrong with it.
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Re: Yunie Rhondaj
They are all the way across. I didn't press enter at a certain point, I kept typing and the words brought themselves down
Lockheart42- Rank Yellow Warrior
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Number of posts : 246
Age : 31
Location : the center of somewhere
Occupation : You wish I knew that he had your something?
Interests : My interests are interesting
The BattleField
Health Points:
(1800/1800)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
(1300/1300)
Experience Points :
(100/100)
Re: Yunie Rhondaj
Whether or not, it is long enough does not matter anymore...you have been approved, so let's just say you won on two fronts.
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