Roku's Little Buddies

[Guest]

Name: Calcriks
Appearance: This creacher has 2 forms and are as follows:
Its First form is just a simple ring with runes along it and it has a dragons head emblum.
Its second form is much more impressive, it turns into a silver dragon(both in collor and material) and its height is about as tall as Roku when on all fours but a good two feet taller than him when it reers up. And as I mentioned it stands on four legs, it also comes equip with wings, which it isn't good at using due to it is made of metal.
Type of Creature: This creacher is a non-biological entity initialy created by alchemy and it takes the shape of a dragon, although its composition is pure silver
Calling: Always around(Roku never removes the ring do to it being another creation of his parents[they spoil him^^])
Elemental Affinity: Metal

Creature Abilities:
1)Imunity to Outside Manipulation/Self Manipulation: Calcriks is imune to being transmusted, or manipulated by an outside force((This is for you Nejisuke)), It can howewver use some manipulation on itself to in example, transmute one of its wings into a Sheild if it is close enough to Roku to defend it. It may not transmute his head though and, fanaly can manipulate any neerby silver.
2) Master/Self Fusion: Calcriks can manipulate to 'fuse' itself to Roku, this will grant Roku to use any of Calcriks' abilities, including the limited flight as the wings of Calcriks will protrude from Roku's back, the rest basicaly turns into an armor, which will be heavy unless Roku effects its gravity. Once this is used, Calcriks can not be used for the next battle
3) Silver Spikes((Master/Self Fusion reqired)): This ability is used as a Counterattack by when an opponent gets close in its attack, the silver armor will shoot out spikes (Still conected to the armor) to skewer what has come close to it, Roku can not move when these spikes are out due to them creating an obstical with the spikes.

Technique Usage:
1) Defencive
2) Special
3) Counter attacking
Benefits:
1) Supplementary
2) Supplementary
3) Defencive
Attack Power: 290

[Guest]

You seriously need to fix you spelling mistakes.

[Kisuke]

For type of creature, just give a detailed explanation of what makes him homunculi and dragon. For elemental affinity, Silver isn't an element on here so simply edit that out. The first ability should be defense and the second should be special. Fix those things first and then I'll do a final look over. The other parts didn't look bad though.

[Guest]

For the silver, his element is metal, it is just very limited to the certain metal

[Guest]

Exactly what makes it so that the creature can't be manipulated?

[Guest]

The magical properies it was forged with, and this way Nejisuke wont cheat and use my own ppl^^ I know him too well

[Nejisuke]

hey, i don't(and can't) control homonculi.....but since it is made of silver i might have made an exception^^....good block...

[Guest]

hehe, i know you too well^^

[Kisuke]

For elemental affinity, get rid of that silver thing. This will cut out the confusion for others that read it. You can explain the silver more in its description but not in Elemental Affinity.

Also, change technique usage 2 to Special

[Guest]

edited

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